Well this time Chris, Dan and All, I know I'm sending to the group,
not just Dan ; -)
I thought my comments were so specific, including some grammar
pieces, that it seemed too much for the whole list. But perhaps not.
Anyway, I wrote Dan this: At any rate this is leap years better! Wow.
I liked it, it was clear, a newbie could follow it, it had
appropriate structure, it gave information, it was soul-full/lyrical
as well. Well done!!!
Plus in editing his piece, it helped me get clearer about how to
talk/write about this potent and lovely work.
Blessings,
Krysta
Thankyou Dan for demonstrating one really productive way of making
good use of this group and in the process showing us how humility
can make us greater.
I know Sheila Saunders also provided helpful feed back to you one on
one as she was having trouble posting to the group. You also have
made good use of that.
I really enjoyed this revised version of your article. As well as
great use of lyrical metaphor, the attitude you convey is much more
helpful and the information more accurate.
Krysta Kavenaugh's comment about understandability by novices is
very difficult to deal with. I find it almost impossible to describe
this work effectively to someone who has never seen it. It seems to
me you can choose the very descriptive route which is what I did in
my introductory articles: The Theory Behind Constellations & What
happens in a Constellation Workshop? or you can try to speak more
directly to the soul in the evocative language that you have used so
well in this article. Nonetheless I am glad Krysta mistakenly sent
these comments to the group as this is an issue with which most
people who have tried to promote this work have attempted to grapple.
So thanks again Dan
"De blues ain't nothin but a good man feelin down!"
hasta la vista
Chris Walsh
Melbourne, Australia
webpage: www.cwalsh.com.au
